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help me fix this up so it flows better.....?
Here it is......
The room smelt beautifully of lavender and the fresh linen that was piled high on top of the drawers. She scoured the small draws for money, sliding her dirty hands into them until her fingers met the wood at the end. She huffed in frustration, there was no money and she didn’t have enough time to search the other rooms. She swiped the linen on top of the drawers and stuffed them in her small leather bag.
Celyn’s hands were clammy and had been shaking so badly she had to pause beside the window to recollect herself again. The wind whipped against her face making her slightly chilled as perspiration rolled along her temples. She felt sick; her stomach lurched and her head spun wildly. But she knew she wasn’t really sick. It was the feeling of guilt and anguish.
She climbed out the window with her bag slung over her shoulder and into the dark night, with only the stars left to guide her through the field.
Oh hi again 
1. "The room smelt of the crisp aroma of fresh linen piled high atop the chest of drawers, intermingled with the beautiful and inviting scent of lavender."
Haha okay that's a little rough, needs a bit of work, but you get the gist.
2. I don't know if sliding is the right word. I get the image of her hands sliding through the clothes and not really searching for anything. Maybe something like
"She scoured the small drawers for money, delving her hands into the soft folded clothes until her fingers met wood at the bottom."
Again, that's rough.
3. I don't think the word "swiped" let's people know she's stealing the linen. Maybe something like,
"She hastily grabbed the pile of linen and stuffed it into her small leather bag, looking around to make sure no one had seen her."
4. "The wind whipped against her face making her slightly chilled as perspiration rolled along her temples."
This sentence needs some structural work.
"Beads of sweat rolled down Ceyln's flushed face, and she invited the cool, soft breeze flowing through the window."
Work on that sentence a little more.
Overall, it's good.
I never would have guessed Celyn would be a thief.
Work on those sentences a little bit that I gave you, and give them your own spin.
Your story's coming along nicely.
Good luck
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